A conversation,
ramblings hastily construed as an explanation,
pouring forth unceremoniously,
unconcerned of consequences
earnest in the pursuit of acceptance.
In the deluge,
a speck, a smidgeon of truth
becomes a pregnant tonnage,
heavily laden ramifications.
A blink,
the weight crashes, eyes flutter,
can only absorb the cognitive kick,
the mind reels, rudely stripped,
violently sobbing, giving birth to realizations.
The newborn,
sheltered in my loving embrace,
the breath hitches, gazing into my dialogue partner's eyes,
my own filled with awe.
Offered up to his scrutiny,
waiting with baited breath,
praying for acceptance.
Look at this,
look at what was brought forth from me
look at how wondrous and awful this is.
Give the bed clothings,
wrap me from sight,
the torn fragments must heal
in a new pattern, the bloody deluge must end.
Merchitown
Copyright © 2008
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scorpiogirl36
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Nov 26 @ 8:18PM
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Very intense poem.... 
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kjac
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Nov 26 @ 8:23PM
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Wow. that was intense!
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1frantastic
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Nov 26 @ 8:28PM
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wow gal...didn't know ya had it in ya! keep on writin'! 
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WSOR
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Nov 26 @ 8:30PM
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That was deep. I like it! 
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butterfly943
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Nov 26 @ 8:33PM
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Intense, Interesting, Powerful..many more.. 
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ISSUESWOPTIONS
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Nov 26 @ 9:00PM
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my comment....
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funisnumber1
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Nov 26 @ 9:06PM
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 Girlfriend! Most excellent....
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kywonder
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Nov 26 @ 9:08PM
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That was beautiful.
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fenderchick
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Nov 26 @ 9:51PM
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Awesome...Now it needs music...It could be a song...I love it.
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Carol386
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Nov 26 @ 11:14PM
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Very profound - 
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Coven4nt
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Nov 26 @ 11:22PM
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Much that is, turns to what's not,
Events blown by wind up in the sky,
Relenteless feelings, yet to be caught,
Eager moments that makes me rely.
Dwell for you, i will not deny!
In you i see what's ever so rare,
The love not gain, what will that imply,
Hence i must, treat you with care.
Yet again, a feeling unfold,
On passion that never gets cold,
Union that can't be so bold.
Reason and trust i long to see,
On a quest that i look for thee,
C'mon babe, i know you unger for love,
Knock on my door, and i'll take you above!
damn, my first poem.... this is hard stuff
maybe i aint that romantic 
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mystery2u888
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Nov 27 @ 12:17AM
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Fabulous.......I love it....gf email
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equuisdancer
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Nov 27 @ 10:50AM
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 Excellent.. will be looking for more!!?
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Merchitown
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Nov 27 @ 1:34PM
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Thank y'all so much. It truly means alot! I honestly have not ever written a poem ever, well, other than the one I wrote in highschool, got a C on it, and vowed never to write a poem again. It took me 2 days to write that sucker. I'm happy to report my writing time has much improved! It was an intense moment, for me anyway. 
Cov, omg, I had to read that twice before I "got" it. Very nicely done!!
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leprichaun_magic
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Nov 27 @ 2:11PM
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That was an important...moment in someones life Merch...well expressed 
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unionman154
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Nov 28 @ 8:48AM
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Very nice. ~*~
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SpiritEnergy
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Nov 29 @ 12:18AM
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Wow! That was great! I am not into poetry but I actually liked it! Few have I seen I liked! This is one of them! 
Cov, that was pretty damn good too!
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AdventureSeeker
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Nov 29 @ 10:45AM
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That was an enjoyable read, Thanks
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